Friday, January 17, 2014

Classy Clauses!

Mrs. Ranney's students have learned that one clever way to add class to your writing is to use a  variety of sentence types!

One type that we have learned to write is a sentence that starts with a dependent clause.

Dependent clauses start with special words:
After, Before, Since, While, When, If, During.

 A dependent clause ends with a comma and cannot stand alone as a sentence. It must be followed by 
an independent clause which is a sentence that can stand alone!




Since Mrs. Ranney's Class has been reading Badger Claws of Ojai, the story of a Chumash Indian boy, 
we decided to summarize the first three chapters 
with some classy clauses!  
(Hey, that sentence has a classy clause!)


Here are some excellent examples of sentences with dependent clauses, written by students in our class:





Since Badger Claws wanted to watch the men's ceremony, he ran down the path toward the sweat house in the early morning.
by Luc and Ryan


While the Shaman said a prayer, he threw a burning stick to the east, south, west, and north.
by Anthony and Lucas

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When Badger Claws snuck into the braves' ceremony, he hid behind a big boulder.
 by Kim, Leann, and Maya
 ***
Since the Shaman was smarter than anybody else, he smelled Badger Claws.
by Annsley and Bella

***

If Badger Claws wouldn't have done the wrong thing, he would not have been caught!
by Kenan and Noah

***

Since Badger Claws snuck into the sweat house, he had to be sent to live with his aunt and uncle.
by Gigi and Michelle


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As Badger Claws cried, the Shaman told him he had broken the rules of the Chumash.
by Colin and Ayden

***

If Badger Claws is able to prove that he is a brave, he will be able to stay in his village of Matilha.
by Jacob and Massimo

***

When the Shaman and Badger Claws were walking up the steep mountain, Badger Claws got very tired.
by Molly and Senuri

***

While Badger Claws started walking to the mountains with the Shaman, the Shaman asked,
 "If you were a man, would you hold my hand?" 
by Blythe and Elinor

***  

When Badger Claws and the Shaman were walking, Badger Claws' feet started to hurt, and he felt like he was going to fall.
by Jade and Lexi

***

After the Shaman turned, Badger Claws started off alone down into the rocky canyon.
by Caiti and Olivia

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That's the end of our summary of the first three chapters!

What do you think of the story so far?

How do you like our sentences?

What do you think will happen next as Badger Claws tries to survive alone in the canyon?

Can you include a dependent clause in your comment? 




3 comments:

  1. Dear Class,
    I have a few dependent clauses for you. After reading the summary of the first chapters, I decided to write a dependent clause of my own. After horseback riding lessons on the farm, my sister and I pet the horses, dogs, and other animals. After writing my own dependent clause, I decided to comment on what will happen next in the story. When Badger Claws is sent to the canyon , I think he will find a house.

    Sincerely,
    Annsley 🍰

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  2. Dear Class,
    During the time Badger Claws is alone in the canyon, I think he will survive by finding a lucky rock and having all his wishes come true.
    Sincerely,
    Blythe

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  3. Dear Class,

    So far this story is fantastic and I am looking forward to finishing it and discovering what happens to Badger Claws.

    If Badger Claws survives in the canyon, it was because he built a house.
    I think it is amazing that he was able to construct a house out of the resources from the valley.

    I hope in the end of the story that Badger Claws will be able to stay in Matilha.

    Cheers,
    Lucs
    ¯¯¯¯¯¯






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